Summary: Comments on papers:
Generally the papers were good. There are specific comments on your papers which you will get
back on Wednesday. Here is a random list of comments about ALL of the papers (not just yours
Use your references. You aren't creating a bibliography of related articles, but a list of papers
YOU REFER TO. (See the cite http://www.cs.usu.edu/~allanv/cs6890/writingArticle.html for
more information about writing style). How you use references is VERY important.
Be careful about taking too much space describing preliminary material. I know there is a
desire to "fill up" the pages, but the MAIN goal is to build a strong case for your research given
the pages you have. Don't be so concerned about filling up the pages that you don't fill them up
WELL! Develop the main idea. Gloss over (or omit) non-essential items.
Be specific. Don't say, "I'll examine XYZ". It sounds weak and unconvincing. Say, "I have
shown that when I combine X and Y using the new algorithm, results are superior to either X or
Use formal writing. Avoid contractions. Avoid beginning a sentence with BUT or AND. Avoid
using "etc" as it doesn't add anything to the writing. Similarly "very" is an empty word, usually.
Don't be afraid to use the writing center to help with grammar and punctuation. Some of you
use capitals strangely or have problems with commas or awkward sentence constructs.
I have now provided a format for you to use (see the webpage) so that eight pages is the same
for all people. In a fixed format, you can't just make the margins wider to make it look like you